This is a merit Abigail, well done. To improve in your redraft: - Be clear about how each convention you are discussing links to the documentary format... e.g. voice over and expository. - Be much more detailed with your examples (distinction criteria expects "elucidated examples" which mean really specific and in depth) - Use the assignment brief to make sure you have covered everything that the task requires; you should discuss how dramatisation, narrativisation and realism are involved in all three documentaries/factual progs (not necessarily for news) - Proofread; spelling, capitals, grammar, sentence structures
This is a merit Abigail, well done. To improve in your redraft: - Be clear about how each convention you are discussing links to the documentary format... e.g. voice over and expository. - Be much more detailed with your examples (distinction criteria expects "elucidated examples" which mean really specific and in depth) - Use the assignment brief to make sure you have covered everything that the task requires; you should discuss how dramatisation, narrativisation and realism are involved in all three documentaries/factual progs (not necessarily for news) - Proofread; spelling, capitals, grammar, sentence structures
This is a merit Abigail, well done. To improve in your redraft:
ReplyDelete- Be clear about how each convention you are discussing links to the documentary format... e.g. voice over and expository.
- Be much more detailed with your examples (distinction criteria expects "elucidated examples" which mean really specific and in depth)
- Use the assignment brief to make sure you have covered everything that the task requires; you should discuss how dramatisation, narrativisation and realism are involved in all three documentaries/factual progs (not necessarily for news)
- Proofread; spelling, capitals, grammar, sentence structures
Jo
This is a merit Abigail, well done. To improve in your redraft:
ReplyDelete- Be clear about how each convention you are discussing links to the documentary format... e.g. voice over and expository.
- Be much more detailed with your examples (distinction criteria expects "elucidated examples" which mean really specific and in depth)
- Use the assignment brief to make sure you have covered everything that the task requires; you should discuss how dramatisation, narrativisation and realism are involved in all three documentaries/factual progs (not necessarily for news)
- Proofread; spelling, capitals, grammar, sentence structures
Jo
thanks for your feedback jo
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